Hello everyone, I am a beginner in maya and I did something that I need you professionals to criticize it so I'd know what to improve on.

I'd really appreciate your honest brutal comments.
Thank you.

Link: https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=V1_1F-pGtjo

Here is the old one I did, you can watch and compare my progress if you have the time please : https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=VnOmX4sTYVs

Thanx in advance (I'm sorry if this is not the right room for this kind of things)