Hey thanks, I went back and changed some of the stuff with it and as for the deserve so rightly i just cant think of another way to end that. I dont want it to just say "of which you deserve" it just doesnt feel completed i guess, so if you have any idea on how to change that up im all ears.

Also i was going from a thousand feet and going to a hundred screams because when you get a bunch of people walking in unison it sounds like there are a lot more people then there really are which is where the hundred screams comes in.