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Old 24-01-2007, 06:06 PM   #1
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Default 3d short

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UO9qTmUN9EA

heres my 3d short i did..... hope u guys enjoy.

feedback is always appreciated.
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Old 24-01-2007, 06:36 PM   #2
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Thumbs up cool

I liked it. The Lazer part is the coolest
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Ha ha - pretty good!

Just a couple of small crits - the laser beam at the end looks a little too solid - you might want to increase the transparency. Also, it might be nice to see something unfortunate happen to him when he trips the laser - at the moment, after seeing that he is just after some cookies, you don't get the feeling that anything bad is going to happen.

Good job and nice choice and use of music.
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Old 25-01-2007, 04:46 AM   #4
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i vote for a huge hammer to come from offscreen and smash him into the wall. (after tripping the laser)

what happens if you hide the glow sources? do the lasers look any better?
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Old 25-01-2007, 04:54 AM   #5
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I was thinking of a door opening and a giant cookie rolling out Indiana Jones style.:mg:
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hei guys thanks for the crits..... the reason i left the ending as it is, its because i wanna leave it to the viewers imagination to wat will happen to him
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Excellent work! Although I want speech instead of subtitles in the end.
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I like it a lot!! Good story line, but I think that those lasers could look better if the source was hidden. Nice job! KUTGW

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Old 23-02-2007, 09:23 AM   #9
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oooo right between the legs

lol nice story line and animation clip... i liked it alot! only crit would be that last laser which was already mentioned and if you made something else like that for longer that would be great nothing to do 2:30am in the morning :p keep up the great work
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wow i liked it alot how long does something like that take to complete?
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oooo right between the legs
^AGREED!!!

pretty cool clip man, but the mother doesnt look agressive enough with her movements, she doesnt seem very mad to me

other than that sweet clip
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