thanks man! what do you mean by "camera linking"? do you mean linking in between the shots?
Also does the story come across? I mean the door shutting and everything? There's gonna be a bit more stuff there to show that it's a little kids room and I will have the sound effects of him running down stairs etc.
Is there anything that stands out that shouldnt be there or is lacking at all?

Alan
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