Very evocative. Nice work.

I'll give you a few technical crits IMHO (does that work, technical opinion?)
Anyway, sound's shouldn't have an apostrophe unless I'm reading it wrong.
'deserve so rightly' is redundant, deserving implies that it is correctly assigned (if that makes sense).
The comma after feeling (line 3) isn't necessary.
However, there should be a comma after 'To this I say' to introduce the implied speech.

Going from a thousand to a hundred (line 1) seems to lessen the impact, though you know better what you're trying to achieve with this line.

Anyway, I'm not an english major or student so feel free to disregard my comments, but those are the few things that jumped out at me after a couple reads. Again, nice work! Don't think I could write like that.