hi,

I tend to agree with legendofzombi and jay. The lines do distract, but if you want to keep them it's your choice. What bothers me a lot more is that he has no face. It is realy hard to look at a character without a face because your eyes are automaticaly drawn to this empty area, since our brain connot make proper sense without it.
Also, do put him into a context or give him a shaddow at least. Environment can improve o a lot.
About harsh citique, I like if somebody is honest as long as it'S constructive and with reason. Sweet talk doesn't help anyone, you just don't learn anything.