Not bad at all, especially for your first crack at it. There are some issues I have with the lighting, it's kinda cut and dry and not natural and mood setting. From 0:45 - 0:54, the body mechanics were weird, the flailing arms, rigid fingers, the sliding neck and there's the lack of secondary movement in general. Also, I think it could have been edited to convey the story better. Either way, it was still pretty good for a first try, good luck with the next project