I am writing a poem for my literature class and I was just wondering what everyone thought about it, ideas are welcome.

I hear the beat of a thousand feet, the screams of a hundred beats.
The defining sound’s of this feat, like a thousand streams just beneath.
We know not the triumphant feeling, of which you deserve so rightly.

You bleed so we can live freely, in this land we take so easy
Far from home in the deserts of reality
Where you see the true colors of humanity

You walk in the place of those like me, whose life is too easy.
We know not the pain of mortality
But we grieve just as easily
We take for granted the life we live
To this I say my fallen one
We shall meet again on the other end.