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Old 29-01-2009, 07:20 AM   #1
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just curious to know what you guys think, im trying to get some input as to what to change in it, it's not the final version so im open to basically any changes you guys could see in it

my webcams crap so as such the recording is crap

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qBFC0P5HHIQ
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Old 29-01-2009, 07:26 AM   #2
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I liked the intro part that was quite catchy.

Not too sure about the second part, it didnt quite gel together, maybe have a look at changing some chords in that key and see if you can get that bit "darker" if you know what I mean
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Old 29-01-2009, 07:30 AM   #3
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you mean the chorus type part or the other part that would be like, behind a solo?
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The part at 38 seconds to 1.10
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It's pretty good.
I agree with Gster though, That second chorusy part dosnt flow together as well as the start. Just keep working at it though.
How long have you been playing for? I started about 2 years ago and have been playing constantly.
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Old 29-01-2009, 09:42 AM   #6
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ah, that part, i get what you mean, it's really hard for me to come up with anything good, i havent learned any scales yet or anything like that, hell i only know like 6 chords :p

i started playing december last year when i got a guitar for christmas, ever since it's been about 6 hours a day on average, until recently, last 2 months or so i've had too much on my mind to play, even though from everything i hear and all my experiances i know that when i have a lot on my mind i should be playing...
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Have a look at the chords that your playing and then look up chord keys and see whay key your in (say you play G, C, D you in the key of G) then see what you can link to so if your in G and you want to change key you can play Am (which is in G and then play Em and F, which changes the key to C (if I remember rightly) then go back to the start chrod progression to change key again.

Though I think that what I just said is actually a key already??... Em I think..??

Been a while since I sat down and played actually thinking about what I was doing.

Hope that makes some sense.
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ever since it's been about 6 hours a day on average
Thats exactly like me.
Ive actually written a few origional songs.

*WATCH AT YOUR OWN RISK*
http://au.youtube.com/watch?v=If8HNpQPE10

But yeah, just experiment around untill you find something that sounds good. Another idea is to get some kinda drumbox program. I found that helped me out because it gave some sort of backup for me to muck around with.
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^i actually really like that song, you should record it again with better quality

i use FL studio sometimes for drum loops and such, but that's hard too :p

that's basically what i've been doin, just effing around till i find a 3 or 4 chord progression that sounds cool, then try a few variants of it, mess around some more, ect. but im just not a creative person at all, i cant even model without blueprints lol

@gster - made sense to me, i was gonna start looking into keys and stuff but there's like, so much else i should probably learn first like scales, and a few more chords, just tp start :p

anyone else notice that it sounds really challenging to play guitar? lol
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