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Old 17-04-2011, 08:02 PM   #1
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Default Interior and Exterior

I did Modeling Texturing Lighting and Rendering

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Old 17-04-2011, 09:59 PM   #2
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To be honest it looks a little cartoonish, I think its the wood texture and metal texture.also the lighting is not right its got no depth and so of you models are not casting any shadows .The cartoon look is that what you wanted? nice try but needs a little work.........dave
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Old 17-04-2011, 10:42 PM   #3
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Come on man, i think its obviously supposed to be cartoonish.
For me the textures let it down. Particularly the wood texture and the direction of the grain. The beam in the roof at the far wall especially. I was also wondering what the helmet and the anchor are made out of? it looks like egg shell with ink splats all over it.

The style of the scene is fun and i think the lighting and over saturation of the textures compliment this. Although i would imagine the light source in the celling is perhaps unnecessary, and may be a reason why dave thinks there are a lack of shadows.

The modeling reminds me of monkey island or something similarly family friendlyish, however i think the radio is a little under designed and could do with some more work. The map picture frame could also do with some joints. Its unlikely to be one piece of wood.

also is it just me or is the antenna glowing slightly?

nice tho... a character behind the desk would really finish it off.

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Old 17-04-2011, 11:23 PM   #4
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no honestdom it not obviously to me that is why I asked at the end was a cartoon look he was after................dave
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I agree the textures are off and need to be adjusted. In general the grain of timber will go length ways...not crossways as this would be weak timber. I like the eggshell look on the helmet and anchor etc but even in a cartoon it would be brass?? Yeh dom the map frame could do with some joints and the grain on both sides made longitudal with the timber. I also agree the centre light may not be needed...as you are in daylight and its a nice bright cheery room I would think the light be off..overall a goody mate...Monkey Island?? dont remember that one dom...

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I think you need to add a bump map in there as well as adding abit of reflectivity
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First of all Thanks to everyone..daverave..honestdom..bullet..murambi..an d i have post this image on many sites but didn't get as good feebacks that i get here.
Thanks once again.

Yes I want to make this scene feel n look like cartoonist.
I think i have to decrease the overall illumination and the texture of helmet n metal props..and a bit specularity n reflectivity on antenna.I will definately make some changes with this image n will post it again.
@HONESTDOM- can you please tell me about monkey island....
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@Bullet- ''the map frame could do with some joints'' didn't get it..:|
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woah, can't believe you guys don't know monkey island...

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Good one. Really like the idea. Monkey Island & Day of the tentacle re the best ones
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Default Exterior-Still lot work to do with this one.

I did modeling Texturing lighting and rendering.

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absolutely love this image
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I really like the lighting and coloring of the interior. A few things bug me though.

- The ceiling and walls seem to be very separate.
- How will the person get behind the desk and back out again?
- No chair.
- As mentioned before, the wood texture, especially on the ceiling looks strange. The grain direction is off.
- The wear/tear on the metal shader for the anchor and helmet would look better if it paid attention to the creases and crevices of the geometry.

The exterior shot. I see you didn't hold back on the grunge lol. The texturing is pretty solid. One area that doesn't seem to have any grunge build up is where that light blue concrete planter meets the ground. The leaves on the plant could use some translucency and as far as the lighting goes, it feels really cold, but that could be what you're after.
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I really like the lighting and coloring of the interior. A few things bug me though.

- The ceiling and walls seem to be very separate.
- How will the person get behind the desk and back out again?
- No chair.
- As mentioned before, the wood texture, especially on the ceiling looks strange. The grain direction is off.
- The wear/tear on the metal shader for the anchor and helmet would look better if it paid attention to the creases and crevices of the geometry.

The exterior shot. I see you didn't hold back on the grunge lol. The texturing is pretty solid. One area that doesn't seem to have any grunge build up is where that light blue concrete planter meets the ground. The leaves on the plant could use some translucency and as far as the lighting goes, it feels really cold, but that could be what you're after.


Thank you for your great and informative feedback.
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