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Old 21-03-2010, 02:58 AM   #1
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This is certainly not my first model...

it is, however, the first one that i have shared with you guys.
as it is a relatively simple model, I would like any critiques that apply.
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Old 21-03-2010, 03:01 AM   #2
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it didn't seem to post my render.
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Old 21-03-2010, 06:33 AM   #3
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hehe, love this show.

Nice model. No crits. Do you plan on texturing it?
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looks great man, you better texture it :p

you should share more! even if it's bad these dudes always have good dtuff to say
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A nice model , i have a couple things that jump out at me that you might want to look at .Firstly on the side you have a balcony but there doesnt seem to be any access to it so not sure what its purpose is. Second are those wondows above the balcony ? if so they dont seem to be transparent and also im not sure they should be arched but maybe round if you are going for an express train look .
This is just a preference thing but i think the down pipe on the right should be a slightly smaller diameter.
A good model though ..i like it .
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Old 21-03-2010, 04:10 PM   #6
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@jsprogg, Those "windows" above the balcony are meant to be arched. I think they're actually the access points to the balcony.

Here's a pic of the building. It's from the show futurama.

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Old 21-03-2010, 04:19 PM   #7
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Mayaniac...sorry my bad i didnt know it was from a show ...thought it was an original design. I have to say though that they dont look arched on the picture you posted ..hehe
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yeah more of a rounded arch than a pointed church like one in the model and a door to the balcony .
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You are talking about the ones on the balcony right?
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yes ..in the pic they are a rounded flattened arch but in the model they are more gothic .
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Old 21-03-2010, 06:35 PM   #12
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Ah, yeah, I see. It's just where s/he's rounded off the glass instead of making it flat. I see what you were talking about.

Taking a look at the reference images I posted, I also thing the banister around the balcony is too tall.
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sorry i did not specify this was not an original work. I suppose I thought everyone knew of futurama.

@mayaniac and acid44...thanks.. and i love that show too.

@jsproggi - I see what you are saying about the window arches
a couple of things account for this.
1. I simply did not collect enough reference materials
2. The windows in question were the last touch before posting (hehehe)

but i will fix them.

I do plan on texturing, but as i am a husband, father, primary revenue outlet, and college student (unrelated field), I am not going to be quick getting it done.

do you guys think i should do more of a realistic texturing or stick with the toon style of texturing as illustrated by the picture mayaniac supplied?

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Dont forget the door onto the balcony If it were me i would stick to the toon style as its a known piece of work.
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yes ok.. i will do the door... but keep in mind that door is on the "back side" of the model from the perspective that i originally rendered
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